User talk:Mckeandrp/sandbox

Hello Ryan! My Comments for you:
 * "Aristotle's teachings would go on to influence many influential groups of thinkers" comes across as a bit of a broad and bias/positive statement. Maybe reword or remove this sentence.


 * "Mshvenieradze states that "Pathos is directly linked with an audience." I do not know who this is and why I should trust them as a source, when I googled this last name I got an olympic water polo player. Please add more in formation regarding this person.


 * "Epicureans and Stoics" I also don't know what these groups are, please explain these groups farther and what they have to do with politics and Hellenistic Groups (I also don't know what these groups are, so if you can explain this idea further that would also be very helpful.

Good luck! Your sources are pretty strong so far and beyond these edits, the article additions you have so far are very informative and helpful! A little more explanation and you shall be good to go! ChyTC (talk) 21:08, 15 November 2017 (UTC)