User talk:Mckenzie324/sandbox

Draft Feedback
I assume the sentences in bold text are the ones you intend to add to WP. Am I right? If so, they seem like good additions, although you might elaborate on them some. Make sure you provide accurate citations for the material when you upload to the mainspace. JAirhart 14:41, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
I think your contributions to the article are very good. A couple of things I noticed are, in this sentence, " As the internet becomes more ingrained in people's everyday life they are desensitized to the mental and emotional issues it can cause," there should be a comma between "everyday life, they" also "effected" should be changed to "affected." Other than those minor things, I think you did very well.Alyssab2473 (talk) 15:51, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

This is a good amount of content, and the only thing that caught my eye was in the 1st bold sentence the word ingrained appears wrong for the sentence.--Zanthos434 (talk) 23:09, 12 March 2019 (UTC)