User talk:Mcmdude

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Peer Review for Tlāhuizcalpantecuhtli
Your edits to the article look great! It is more accessible and the information is conveyed more clearly.

Some suggestions I have include:
 * Expanding the lead paragraph to include a bit more information and to accurately reflect the information in the article
 * "fifth sun" should be capitalized ("Fifth Sun"). It may be also useful to mention that this refers to the fifth creation of the world
 * The Origin Story uses both past and present tense. It would be clearer to stick to a single tense (I would think past as the world has already been created).
 * You could add a section that describes various representations of Tlāhuizcalpantecuhtli and the shared features between them
 * General proofreading corrections would improve the article overall. You can also simplify wordier sentences. (i.e. "Quetzalcoatl throws himself in into a bonfire" --> "Quetzalcoatl threw himself into a bonfire," and "Tlahuizcalpantecuhtli is believed to cause harm to people by shooting darts" --> "Tlahuizcalpantecuhtli harms people by shooting darts").

Good job! Kathleenvoight (talk) 20:38, 14 October 2018 (UTC)