User talk:Mcmdude/sandbox

Peer Review
I thought your intro was really strong — it was concise but demonstrated why your deity was so important. I also thought your section on the origin story worked well — my only suggestion would be to clarify the order of things, and more deliberately introduce the deities and rulers that you name. The section titled "Effects" could be clearer — even after reading it, I still wasn't sure what the title meant, or how it related to the page as a whole. I wish you had expanded more on the presence of Tlāhuizcalpantecuhtli in Aztec daily life — how people interacted with/worshipped him, his significance in the calendar. I like the images you uploaded, and I think you could make them stronger by interpreting them a bit and writing about how Tlāhuizcalpantecuhtli is usually depicted, what are his physical attributes, etc. It's also really nice that readers can click to expand the images, especially since two of them are very intricate. Pestocavatappi (talk) 20:54, 8 October 2018 (UTC) (Clara)