User talk:Meganjoss/sandbox

Hi before making my article I wanted to check to see if you had any suggestions for changes. Also two of my sources seem to have issues that I'm not sure how to fix. Thanks!

Hi Meganjoss, I have some comments on your article evaluation.
 * Good job noting that some of the sources were not accessible. This is a common problem that is difficult to address.
 * I like your observation that some recent additions to the part are not mentioned in the article. This seems like an opportunity for a contribution.

Nice job :) Groceryheist (talk) 21:15, 12 January 2019 (UTC)

My Feedback
Hi I'm happy to see the work you've done on your article so far. You've recieved some really great feedback from the others, so I'll just reemphasize that I think it would be nice to learn something about what makes the brand distinctive and appealing to consumers or to critics. It is also important to find more robust secondary sources. This will help you establish the notability of the topic and also give you more information. You might look to fashion magazines or journalistic websites. I think if you take these steps then this article can be really good! I'm looking forward to seeing how things develop! Groceryheist (talk) 05:24, 6 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Evaluation
Looking at your Hello Molly draft, I think the lead section of the article could be expanded to highlight some more key information about the online clothing store that would be beneficial to the audience. While you don't want to repeat what's talked about later in the article, I think some more information about the significance of Hello Molly should be included in that initial introduction. After reading the rest of what you have so far for the article, I think it would be helpful to explicitly state something about the brand that makes it unique and what its overall message/design is.

So far you have the sections, "History" and "Pop Culture". I think this initial approach is a solid one and definitely provides some clarity on the history of the brand and its relevance in today's culture - it's something I think I'm going to incorporate in my own article eventually! I think these sections just need to be fleshed out more so content-wise and more sections potentially added if you find another topic related to Hello Molly that deserves its own section. I believe you quote Vogue in the Pop Culture section but you didn't include quotations around what was stated, so just double check that section when you get a chance.

As far as your sources, it seems most of them are online articles so maybe try and seek out a more reliable source such as textbooks or journal articles to strengthen the article. Your links work but I believe you may have accidentally duplicated on fo them in the Sources section.

So far your approach to the article is neutral and you have stated information in a way that is clear and informative. As I mentioned before, more information in the different sections will definitely strengthen the article overall. You can also hyperlink particular names (i.e. the celebrities you talk about) to their corresponding Wikipedia pages. But overall this is a good start and I love Hello Molly so I'm excited to see your progress on this article! (Savannaellis (talk) 18:58, 1 February 2019 (UTC))

Peer Evaluation by NJ
Your lead is concise and easy to understand. But may be a little too concise, one way to approach and expand is by looking at other clothing retailers with wikipedia pages and see what kind of information they usually include in this section.

Your structure is nice and similar to mine since we're both doing brands. Its easy to follow and covers the brand holistically and in a balanced manner.

The content is definitely neutral with no bias. You do a good job at strictl stating facts and what it is without the use of "flowery" words.

As for sources, I believe you can improve your sourcing by highlighting celebrities, and other brands mentioned and clicking the link button on the top to connect them with other existing wikis.

Overall though, its nicely done but I would like to see a little more expansion on content in the history section or any scandals, fun facts, or accomplishments of the brand to show its notability. Nignaco (talk) 05:14, 2 February 2019 (UTC)