User talk:Meganmurphy17/sandbox

Outline:

Brief Description-Running away from personal destiny

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Etymology

-Biblical Origin --Jonah and the Whale --Song of Jonah -Abraham Maslow --Picture Added--http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/thumb/e/e0/Abraham_Maslow.jpg/220px-Abraham_Maslow.jpg --Birth-Death --Short description of qualifications --Jonah Complex

Causes Contemporary Views on Jonah Complex

-Analogies (Sinking Ship) -Journey of 1000 miles begins with the first step

Connections to Psychoanalytic Theory

-Defense Mechanisms --Repression --Rationalization

Jonah Complex vs. Peter Pan Syndrome?

-Michael Jackson -- "I am Peter Pan in my heart."

References -Bible -The Song of Jonah: A Metrical Analysis Author(s): Duane L. ChristensenReviewed work(s):Source: Journal of Biblical Literature, Vol. 104, No. 2 (Jun., 1985), pp. 217-231 -http://www.executive-and-life-coaching.com/jonah-complex.html -Swallowing Jonah: The Eclipse of Parody Author(s): ARNOLD J. BAND Reviewed work(s):Source: Prooftexts, Vol. 10, No. 2, Tenth Anniversary Volume, Part 2 (MAY 1990), pp. 177-195 -The Jonah Complex by Andre Lacocque; Pierre-Emmanuel Lacocque Review by: James S. AckermanThe Journal of Religion, Vol. 64, No. 3 (Jul., 1984), pp. 372-373 -Excerpt from Personality and Personal Growth (6th ed.) Frager, R., & Fadiman, J. (2005). New York: Pearson Prentice Hall pg.342: -Desacralizing life and its mystery: The Jonah complex revisited. Lacocque, Pierre-E.. Journal of Psychology and Theology10. 2

Feedback for the Jonah Complex Article
Hi Megan, Overall, your article on the Jonah Complex was really good. Here are a couple of suggestions for improvement and some places where I thought the article was really good!

Areas of Improvement:

1. Headings, spacing and formatting - It is difficult to tell as of now which areas belong under the same or different headings. To give the bigger sections separated and larger headings, you can insert ==Views on the Jonah Complex==  instead of keeping the section title in the same font and format. This way, subsections are discernible from over-arching headings. The bullet points in the section titled “Causes” need to be properly formatted. Also, all of the sections are close and the paragraphs are dense. Adding some space to separate ideas will facilitate easier reading and understanding of your article.

2. Fully relating examples to article topic - Several examples are cited to help the reader more fully understand the applications of the idea of a Jonah complex. Some of them can be elaborated further to appropriately demonstrate their relation to the topic. In the section titled Psychoanalytic theory, elements of Freudian theory are introduced and explained. The connection to the Jonah Complex is mentioned in the final sentence, but there may be more to say to fully explain the relation of these ideas.

3. Proofread the article. Reading through, the information is really good but there are a lot of typos and even some phrases that could be worded a little better to make for an easier read for people who are just skimming through Wikipedia.

Strengths

1.Clear progression and organization - The article overall does an accurate job of demonstrating the idea of the Jonah Complex. The inclusion of the theory’s history, examples, and relations to other theories provides a broad understanding of the topic.

2. A nice job of keeping much of the existing work and just expanding upon it to create a very comprehensive article that really gives readers a great understanding of the concept!

3. Great inclusion of a lot of Maslow’s theories on self-actualization. Consider possibly even including some internal links to some of Maslow’s work; your article makes the connections between his work and the Jonah Complex very clear.

Bthomas2 (talk) 21:14, 15 November 2012 (UTC)

Thank you so much for all your feedback. The only reason we were able to fix the headings was because of your help. Your feedback was great and we will definitely use it to edit our article. Thank you again!! Meganmurphy17 (talk) 15:45, 16 November 2012 (UTC)