User talk:Melbushr

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Your submission at Articles for creation: Aviation automation (November 4)
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SwisterTwister  talk  08:05, 4 November 2015 (UTC)

AfC notification: Draft:Aviation automation has a new comment
 I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Aviation automation. Thanks! LaMona (talk) 01:28, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Aviation automation (November 18)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Mr. Guye was:

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Mr. Guye (talk) 03:52, 18 November 2015 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW - vcheng52
"For a more broad understanding of aviation history, please see: History of aviation" - put this in the "See Also" section

due to the requirement for additional monitoring and computer programming of electronic flight instrument systems.

Over-reliance and Over-trusting automation can lead a pilot to lose situational awareness

Although there are benefits, automation has ushered in a new set of potential flight hazards ranging from fatal data input errors to significantly increased head-down time during key phases of flight.

This leads to increased ‘head-down’ time during an already high workload phase of flight. Explain head-down time or link to an explanation.

run on sentence: A relevant example is the crash of Air New Zealand’s flight 901 into Mount Erebus, caused by the input of incorrect data into the navigation system after a route change. The pilot failed to independently verify the accuracy of the new flight plan (26 nautical miles off-course), presumably because they blindly trusted the automated system.[4]

run on sentence: Research reveals that while the highly automated aircrafts of today are much safer than those of yesterday, there is still a significant need for improvement. Namely in the field of training pilots to better understand, use and respond to the automated systems, especially during abnormal phases of flight

please explain or link to head-down time

Very good detailed article. There's a little bit of repetition and a lot of detail that you might want to cut out but still a very good article.


 * The primrose path to perdition is accepting the word of a fellow course member as a genuine critique of your work. They have as little expertise here as you do. Some of the evidence is that they have not signed their comment. While criticising the work of others may be part of your course assignment, I suspect you need to criticise the work as if you knew about editing Wikipedia, not simply as a generic class assignment. YOUr course leader needs to guide you all rather differently. Fiddle   Faddle  10:27, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Aviation automation (November 30)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Timtrent was:

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Fiddle  Faddle  10:16, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

Reply to your Articles for Creation Help Desk question
Hello, Melbushr! I'm Timtrent. I have replied to your question about a submission at the WikiProject Articles for Creation Help Desk. Fiddle  Faddle  10:24, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

AfC notification: Draft:Aviation automation has a new comment
 I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Aviation automation. Thanks! Fiddle  Faddle  10:41, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for your invitation to make a further review
One of the problems with offering a second review on the same topic is that one stands too close to the draft, and may either be too pedantic or not pedantic enough.. I have found through rather longer experience than I care to mention that a different pair of eyes almost always produces the best outcome for the eventual article. IT may be disappointing, but I will decline your kind invitation. This will not, your professor assures me, affect any final grading. They recognise that WP:AFC reviews are outside their tutorial control. Fiddle  Faddle  17:49, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

AfC notification: Draft:Aviation automation has a new comment
 I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Aviation automation. Thanks! Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 21:22, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Final Article: Aviation Automation
Hi Dr. Kearns,

Here is the link to my article on aviation automation: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Aviation_automation

Unfortunately, I did not manage to get it onto the main space. My 4th submission, which I had high hopes for it being accepted due to my compliance with an experienced editor's suggestions was put on hold. The reason cited was that it would not be reviewed until the "issue" with our course had been addressed.

As for my contribution, I wrote the entire article myself; I was hoping that it would be published so that the article could receive contributions from other editors and grow over time.

Moving forward
Hi Melbushr. I think one important thing that your draft still lacks is a lead section. WP:LEAD is a good place to get started figuring out what that should look like. In short, the lead is supposed to provide a brief summary of the major points of the article. A reader should be able to read the lead and get a sense of what the article is about. The first sentence should be a brief statement about what the article covers - something like: "Aviation automation refers to [whatever it is]." In the second sentence, perhaps you could explain why this is important, and continue from there hitting the main points that you cover in the article. You're probably looking about a paragraph, maybe two. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:27, 4 December 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Aviation automation (December 4)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Timtrent was:

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Fiddle  Faddle  23:09, 4 December 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Aviation automation (December 31)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by RadioFan was:

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RadioFan (talk) 04:30, 31 December 2015 (UTC)

Your draft article, Draft:Aviation automation


Hello, Melbushr. It has been over six months since you last edited your Articles for Creation draft article submission, "Aviation automation".

In accordance with our policy that Articles for Creation is not for the indefinite hosting of material deemed unsuitable for the encyclopedia mainspace, the draft has been nominated for deletion. If you plan on working on it further, or editing it to address the issues raised if it was declined, simply and remove the  or  code.

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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. Avic ennasis @ 18:20, 18 Kislev 5777 / 18:20, 18 December 2016 (UTC)