User talk:Melicans/Chi (Chobits)

Subsections
Do you really think we can fill up all of those with useful information? I don't have a good feeling about this. I may have to offer some serious editing input. ;)PiccoloNamek 14:42, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
 * It's possible. The article is still a long ways away from being anywhere near my satisfaction (it's just barebones now), but I'd like to see how it goes and then decide from there. MelicansMatkin 16:32, 6 November 2007 (UTC)

Edits
I have no objection at all to you editing this page PiccoloNamek; might as well make it a collaboration to see how good of an article it can become with the input of two editors rather than just one. MelicansMatkin 18:24, 6 November 2007 (UTC)

A tip
When discussing events that happen during the course of the story, the present tense should always be used. Past tense can be used when discussing something that occurs before the story beings. (Such as Freya's creation, for example.)

I worked on the kidnap section a little, too.PiccoloNamek 02:36, 11 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the tip! :-) MelicansMatkin 02:42, 11 November 2007 (UTC)

Oops! I don't know why I put "attempt". I could have sworn I put "attempted". I guess I had a brain/fingers disconnect.PiccoloNamek 02:50, 11 November 2007 (UTC)

Just for me
Personally, I think that is far too much plot information for a character article. All of the information presented so far is in-universe information, and this just pushes it over the top, IMO.

Almost all of that information applies to the anime exclusively, too. PiccoloNamek 19:46, 15 November 2007 (UTC)
 * I'm more familiar with the anime than with the manga to be honest. I knew when I wrote it that it was too much plot, but I'm not sure how to shorten it so that it is an acceptable amount of information and pertaining more to the manga than the anime.  Could you help me with this? MelicansMatkin 20:19, 15 November 2007 (UTC)

I'm not sure what to do, really. Much of the information is covered in either the character article already. And not only that,toward the end of the story, the manga becomes radically different from the anime. You'd have to write a completely separate section just to cover it. Personally, I think most or all of it should be scrapped, at least for the time being. PiccoloNamek 06:41, 16 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Okay, I've tried to remove as much irrelevant data as I can pertaining to that, and make it more similar to the manga. While I own the entire anime series I only own the first six volumes of the manga, which is definitely contributing to the problem.
 * I've just written Relationship with Chitose Hibiya as well, which incorporates all of the information previously in A City With No People. Some of the information conflicts with the Elda section below, or is also mentioned in that section, so I'm wondering if Relationship with Chitose Hibiya should just be flat out scrapped and moving the information on A City With No People to Elda instead.  Relationship to Hideki should probably be removed too; really the only subsection there that should be kept is Relationship with other persocoms.  What do you think? MelicansMatkin 14:22, 16 November 2007 (UTC)

Ready to move
I'm ready to move the Chi page to an actual article. I've cleaned it up, removed a lot of unnecessary/fancrufty information, tweaked some formatting, and moved some things around so that it fits on the page better. Before I move it, could you give the page one last run-through and let me know/edit it if you see any glaring inconsisticies/errors? I figure that the rest of the references can be added later. MelicansMatkin (talk) 01:58, 18 November 2007 (UTC)


 * It looks fine for now, but I'm still wary about the Person just for me section. I may completely rewrite it at some point in the future so that it provides a more balanced view.PiccoloNamek (talk) 19:34, 18 November 2007 (UTC)
 * That's probably a good thing. I'll create the article now. MelicansMatkin (talk) 20:31, 18 November 2007 (UTC)