User talk:Melissa F/sandbox

Hi Melissa, I think it's a very interesting topic and I like the sections you are adding, particularly the controversy section as I felt the original article was missing this. However I notice the controversy section is quite small, and I think the reader's general understanding of the topic would improve with specific examples of controversies or court cases regarding the matter. Howley.l (talk) 16:14, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey Melissa, thanks for the feedback. I agree that some of my sentences need restructuring. Some are quite long and I will shorten these. I will also alter the subtitles of the history section to more accurately reflect the time period they describe. Also, I have changed the Twentiety Century bit so that not every sentence starts with 'The.' Thanks again for the feedback. Howley.l (talk) 16:24, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Great topic! Strong introduction and effective definition of captive insurance. Nonetheless, consider expanding on the "types of cells" section and explaining how it ties back to captive insurance. Also I feel there is a lot of potential in the legal implications and regulatory concerns of this topic. Lastly, it would also be helpful to provide real-life examples. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Elbamaria0005 (talk • contribs) 16:47, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback! I have taken your suggestions into account, and will add examples to the controversy section and will expand on the philosophical framework of the concept.