User talk:Melissa Luo/sandbox

Peer review of Fireproofing

By seeing Wikipedia page of the Fireproofing, already there is a lot of information on Fireproofing, including definition, installation method, history. However, your draft contains deep information beyond the previous page, I think you will contribute well to share information on fireproofing. Especially, I liked you've done well on comparing between the concept of fire wall and fire barriers/ partitions and giving certainty of meanings. Also, Holding links on several keywords(especially structural materials) made even more understandable draft.(which gave me an idea for my draft). If you can find related photographs, it will enhance the page, too. Also I recommend if you to separate fireproofing methods into types: plaster, structural(vault and steel bar), sheets(board) and so on. I think it will make clear alignment on the wiki page.

Great job! and keep on going!

Response to peer review
Thanks for your review and encouragement!

I agree that images would make it easier to understand the information. I will try to find some pictures. Melissa Luo (talk) 01:34, 26 November 2017 (UTC)

Instructor comments
As your peer reviewer wrote, "Great job!" She has made some good comments, to which I would add checking your use of citation templates. The "last" field is used for the author's last name, not a date, and the "first" field is used for the author's first name. Also, see WP:Citing sources to reduce redundant citations. Are there any external links you could add to fireproofing industry organizations?

Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 03:20, 27 November 2017 (UTC)