User talk:Mercadesglancy/sandbox

I evaluated an article in my sandbox. It was an evaluation of the article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Buddhist_studies

Mercades' Peer Review
In the first paragraph, maybe you could add a hyperlink for the word "Orishas", so someone could just click on the word if they're not sure of what an Orisha is. I believe a source is needed for your definition of Ashe* (I couldn't figure out how to do the accent). Other than that, you seem to have a very strong draft.Ar92597 (talk) 04:35, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Mercades' Peer Review
First paragraph, I would remove the "or" parts, just stick to one of the phrases. In the third paragraph I would reword the "humans" part to where humans is not included maybe put a culture of people. The last paragraph I would place them apart because its get a little confusing.Extremely good rough draft, too examples from yours to better mine a lot more. --Asantiago787 (talk) 17:35, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Mercades Peer Review
Your draft is structured beautifully and the content provided on the draft was also clear, concise,and neutral. I do feel that the draft should have a bit more explanations in order to provide readers a clear understanding of what is being stated. For example you stated that humans do not worship Olorun directly, perhaps a brief explanation of why they do not worship Olorun, and why he does not partake in human rituals. You draft was easy to read as well, which is crucial for a successful article! Keep up the good work! Imaang (talk) 05:49, 20 October 2018 (UTC)