User talk:Mercyvalladares/sandbox

Julie's Peer Review
While i'm sure there isn't a lot of information readily available on this topic, i think headings and subheadings can still come in handy to help organize the page! For example, a separate heading talking about the 3 approaches would be helpful!

You have really great sources too! Those all seem reliable, and they are also full of information and it would be cool to utilize them more. For example your last citation (5) has a whole subheading dedicated to Deaf Identity. You can definitely cite your articles more than once and it would be a good idea to use them to expand the page further.

In the section about the 3 main approaches, i'm not sure what you mean by "the actual condition". I recommend expanding on that.

Overall, this is a great start to the page! It carries great a neutral tone and I hope to see it keep growing.

Yadira's Peer Review
So far this is a very clear and concise article and you've done a great job of looking for sources with the limited information you have. My only concern is the sources you have, seem to be primary sourcing that could be interpreted as doing your own research, but so far you've done a good job of just summarizing the information.

It might be helpful to see if you can find any videos with LSC because it would be really cool to be able to visualize the language. It might also be helpful if you could break the page down further and talk about aspects of the language itself, then maybe some cultural aspects, etc. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yflores3 (talk • contribs) 21:23, 24 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer's review
I like your consideration!! 1) ”Cuban Sign Language, (“lengua de señas cubana”, or LSC) is the language spoken of the Deaf community in Cuba. There are approximately 19,000 users of the language.[1]” -	How about changing the word “spoken” to other express because of different modality?

2) I’m curious about Cuban National Association of Deaf’s mention about their language.

3) How about using your video to tell Cuban Sign Language’s fingerspell? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mayu Yamada (talk • contribs) 22:16, 24 March 2019 (UTC)

Kim's Peer Review
I can imagine that it’s hard to find appropriate and informative sources for this topic, but I think this article would benefit from a little more expansion on the different subsections. In order to make these different sections clear and distinct, I think you should use formal subheadings so it’s easier for the reader to follow. If possible, you can try to expand on the history of Cuban Sign Language and its connection to Deaf culture in Cuba. Since you mention ANSOC, it might be helpful to describe the specific work they do for LSC and bilingual education. The third paragraph about the three main approaches to talking about Deaf people can be broken up into three short paragraphs with more detail. It would also be interesting to see a section on the alphabet and the grammar of Cuban Sign Language. Overall, I think this is a great start! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kimcastillo (talk • contribs) 01:31, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Rotceh's Peer Review
I think this is a great start to this article! I'm sure it may be had to find reliable sources on this topic, so you did a great job of putting together what you were able to find. One thing that I suggest is having a clear structure with different sections starting with a lead section. I think your first two sentences could be a great start to the lead section and perhaps you could add a sentence or two about other topics you will cover in the article such how LSC is an important part of the culture of the Deaf community that you mention later. Maybe you could take a look at some other pages of other signed languages to see examples of various sections. For example, I see that the British Sign Language, German Sign Language and American Sign Language all have sections about linguistics such as phonology and grammar. I'm not sure how many reliable sources you would be able to find about Cuban Sign Language and linguistics, but it may be worth to search. You also mention when the Cuban National Association of Deaf was founded and this could be a great section to add to about the history of the language or even have the Cuban National Association of the Deaf be it's own section where you talk about what the association has done/ its mission. The second section that talks about the 3 main approaches when talking about Deaf people was a bit unclear to me, so maybe you could expand on that a little bit and talk about how these approaches impact society/the Deaf community in Cuban. I think you do a great job of maintaining a neutral tone throughout the article. I like how in the last section you talk about the culture of the deaf community. As you add to this section remember to stay objective as I think this can be a section where it can be harder to stay neutral. Overall, this is a great start and I think after you get some clear sections and work on the overall structure of the article it will help guide you as you continue to add more content. I am excited to read the finished article to learn more about Cuban Sign Language! rvg 04:32, 25 March 2019 (UTC)RotcVG — Preceding unsigned comment added by RotcVG (talk • contribs)

Mercy's Response
I really want to thank you all for reading my article and reviewing it! You all gave me incredibly good feedback that I have started implementing into my article! In response to Yadira's peer review specifically, I was a little confused as to what you mean by my sources seem to be "primary sourcing". If you could expand on that, that would be great! Again, thank you so much for all of your help and I hope you like the finished article! Mercyvalladares (talk) 18:31, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

Suggestions
Nice work finding relevant sources! You might want to keep thinking a bit more about the organization of this page. You could borrow sections from the page on ASL or other sign languages to think about possible headings and organization. The word "aspect" in some of the headings doesn't buy you much; you could replace "Educational Aspect" with "Deaf Education" for example. I think the medical information might be useful, but probably shouldn't go first as it is less relevant to the language than some other things. If you can find an example of CSL, that would be terrific. Ncaselli (talk) 00:54, 30 April 2019 (UTC)