User talk:MetaFeta777/sandbox

Saying Plutarch had trouble gathering information sounds subjective and sounds like you are just putting other people's work in / The last sentence also sounds a bit awkward try saying something without one last time / A few more sources could also help strengthen points made / Overall great job just those few small things / Talk about how his reforms were military-oriented / How he did this in accordance with the oracle / as well as if you are going to talk about a bit of his life there is a great in-depth biography on the original page you may return to

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Thank you for your review, KortClifford, it is very helpful and you give good suggestions for improvement, both in terms of clarity and citations. Perhaps after looking at the original Lycurgus article on Wikipedia, you could suggest a few areas of improvement for your peer in terms of content? What do you think should be improved on the original page?

MetaFeta777 It looks like the content you added is to the lead section, is that right? If so, you'll have to figure out what to do with the bullet points because those can't appear in the lead. I agree with your peer reviewer that you need to cite the information about Plutarch, and even include the relevant passages. I like the direction you're taking with the content of this article, but there was not a substantial amount for your peer reviewer to work with. Going forward, please incorporate all the changes your peer reviewer suggested and, once you are done with that, your biggest goal will be to simply keep adding (lots more!) content to the page. I'm excited to see where this goes, and what the final product will look like! Please let me know if you have any questions, and reply to this comment when you have seen it with your plans and goals for improvement over the next month. Don't forget to tag me and sign with 4 tildes (~)! Gardneca (talk) 14:26, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

I haven't read Plutarch's account of Lycurgus yet so I'll be sure to use that as a source when I can. I'll also take this review into consideration and be sure to cite any information that hasn't yet been clarified. I do have one question though: Are we creating new articles from the ground up or are we simply editing the articles that already exist? MetaFeta777 (talk) 21:42, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Sounds great, MetaFeta777, I'm really looking forward to seeing your final product! And to answer your question, you could either improve an existing article, or create one that doesn't exist - the choice was yours at the beginning of the semester. Why, is there a page that doesn't exist that you're interested in creating? Gardneca (talk) 18:25, 12 November 2019 (UTC) I'm not looking to create a new article, but I'm glad to know that I just need to improve the existing article. I've read it before but I'll be sure to analyze it to best of my abilities and improve upon aspects that are lacking substance. Thank you for your help! MetaFeta777 (talk) 12:06, 15 November 2019 (UTC)