User talk:Mfrigon/sandbox

Hey Margeau,

The outline looks really good and its clear you guys knew your stuff! With that being said, Megan and I have found some things that we found really strengthed your pages and others that would make your page even better.

Strengths - The overall content of this page is incredibly well organized and factual. The page reads much like a scientific journal, and neither Megan nor I were worried about misinformation. - The limitations section of this page was an excellent addition to that page, and one that my group had not thought of before reading this. - Your knowledge of the in-text wikipedia citations and shortcuts made the outline appear more complete and helped us navigate to connecting ideas that you were trying to make.

Areas of Improvement - Pictures, specifically of the gestalt test would really liven up the page - The list of attributional biases appears incomplete on the page, and although we understand you may not have finished it, the actual page would be much better with a description for all of the examples. - The introduction appears a bit long. In saying this, Megan and I believe that it would be beneficial to the page to separate the final two paragraphs of that section into a section of its own, perhaps titling it "Effects of Attributional Biases".

Hope this helps, but still really nice job! Delorech (talk) 15:32, 16 November 2012 (UTC) Chris DeLorenzo