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Hi Melody, just want to let you know that I left more thorough peer review on your peer review page, here's the link:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mfs2162/Cognitive_development/Itsashleyxu_Peer_Review?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review Itsashleyxu (talk) 18:42, 4 November 2020 (UTC)

Great job adding citations to the original article, it really gives the article more credibility since the original version didn’t have any citation. “Despite being the first to develop a systemic study of cognitive development, Piaget was not the first to theorize about cognitive development[2]. A few that are worth mentioning are included in the following Historical Origins chart.” The first who? scientist? psychologist? A few what? scientists? people who have made contributions to cog development theory? Might want to be more clear here. Adding Freud into the chart is a great since he was such a big part in psychology field. But maybe you can add one or two more sentences describing his contribution. Itsashleyxu (talk) 22:08, 30 October 2020 (UTC)