User talk:Mh853/sandbox

Tone
Great paragraph. Proper use of tone and linking to existing articles. Some of the information you've included is possibly too specific to upload to the perry/fruit page, but it can be added and may possibly be deleted or not. As the paragraph(s) already under perry/fruit are decent you will have to piece apart your information to add it to the existing paragraphs. Bryantlib (talk) 04:01, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:32, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

content
Really great job on this paragraph. I only suggest that you proof read at this point in time. Ciderprof1 (talk) 16:49, 7 May 2018 (UTC)