User talk:Micah6001/The Anabasis of Alexander

Lead

The Changes made for clarity in this version of the lead are very effective at framing the story. Particularly the inclusion of how the framing of Xenophon's story effected the version of alexanders story

Article Body

You haven't edited the section on content but this could easily be split in separate sections that include more detail of the account. A section could also easily be added on xenophon and other greek authors impact on how the story of Alexander is told.

Criticism

This section is effective at describing faults in Arrians telling of Alexanders campaigns but could have specific examples from the text to demonstrate how he deifying alexander, or more direct paraphrasing of Historians on the same topic

Sources

The sources used here are appropriate

Overall

You've made some effective contributions to improve clarity, that would have good impact on the summary section. This article could use a lot of work in general so theres room for expansion to other sections or subsections.


 * 1) Lead section: The lead section communicates the importance of the topic. Most important stuff about the Anabasis of Alexander seems reflected in this section. Still, it is very heavy, and you may consider moving some of the content here into the article itself. You could even consider forming a new section.


 * 1) Clarity of article structure: Sections are well-organized. 'Content,' 'Criticism,' and 'Modern Editions' sections seem to balance most of the important info in the article. 'References,' 'Further Reading,' and 'External Links' look good.


 * 1) Coverage balance: It is good that information was added under criticism. I think that this makes the article more balanced. Perspectives reflected here seem solid.


 * 1) Content neutrality: The revised criticism section has greater potential to make readers question the Anabasis as a source, but that is not a bad thing. It is necessary to gauge a work's limitations. No strong claims are made using generic terms like "some people say." I would, however, like to see more backup for the claim that Arian allowed his own views to permeate the Anabasis if you can find an additional source.


 * 1) Sources: Aside from the aforementioned, the article's content looks well-cited. The original article has plenty of sources.

Mocseny3 (talk) 22:56, 19 November 2021 (UTC)