User talk:Miccimeek/Overdrafting/Addylynr Peer Review

Great job! This article is extremely informative. My biggest observation is your explanations are extremely long-winded. I would encourage more concise writing. You could reduce introductory phrases, prepositional phrases, and unnecessary words, and replace long phrases with one word. I would also add some shorter, more concise sentences to make the paragraphs easier to read. Perhaps you could break some of your longer sentences into a couple, shorter sentences. In your first section, environmental impacts, there are two misuses of semicolons (semicolons should not be used before 'which'), and the word 'contaminants' is spelled incorrectly. Your second section, socio-economic impacts, is the most repetitive. Try not to use the same words and phrases over and over again. Your third section, possible solutions, includes a lot of different ideas. I would suggest using subheadings or starting new paragraphs between each, different solution. Addylynr (talk) 05:15, 4 December 2023 (UTC)