User talk:Millelin/sandbox

Hello
My name is Miles and I am a student in your class. I look forward to reviewing your article. So far, it looks really nice and it has piqued my interest in power mapping. I am new to the practice of power mapping, so comments on content may be limited. However, I believe that I may be able to offer some insight to wiki syntax that would improve the overall functioning of the article. I have added this page to my watchlist, so if you comment beneath this note I will be able to respond. Thanks for all your hardwork and, again, your page looks really nice! Umich hudsonmh (talk) 20:26, 8 March 2014 (UTC)

Peer Review
Power Mapping

The introduction to this article provides readers with a broad, general understanding of what a power map is. I, having never been introduced to a power map, was able to understand the concept easily based on this introduction. However, there were a few terms or concepts that I was unfamiliar with, such as social terrain. It may help to either link concepts to another wiki article that will explain the idea further, or to provide an explanation within the power mapping article. Similarly, it may improve the article to clarify “relationships” and “change.” Are the relationships between chemicals, stakeholders, or families? What kind of change? I am assuming social. Also, there are a few grammatical errors. There is no period at the end of sentence three.

(This is Lindsey, Amy I agree with the social terrain term---do you think we should change the term?-linking to the respective wiki page wouldn't make sense as it is is using the term in context of social media. Maybe we could just change it to "community"??) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Millelin (talk • contribs) 18:22, 16 March 2014 (UTC)

Graphic

The graphic of a power map is a very nice touch. It allows the reader greater understanding of this tool. I think it may further help the reader’s understanding if a completed version of a power map were provided. This will let readers know what a power map may look like once it is filled in.

(This is Lindsey, Amy I moved the graphic down to the guidelines sectio ...I thought it made more sense there after some thought but let me know if you think it should stay in its original spot) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Millelin (talk • contribs) 18:30, 16 March 2014 (UTC)

Power Mapping Guidelines

This section does a nice job of providing general guidelines on how to create a power map. However, there are a few aesthetic and grammatical issues that may improve readability of this section. First, after the second sentence, an example is provided. It may help the reader to know that this is an example, and exactly where the example begins. I would suggest adding a bolded for example:

Also, it may be beneficial to include an internal link to Democracy for America and the American Association of University Women.

Under the first step, the second sentence, "Your target is the person, organization or institution who has you want to influence" should be edited for grammer.

Also, adding some bold to name each of the five steps, and then using the regular font to describe the step may make it easier to read.

Uses

Very nice first paragraph! I especially like the final sentence that ties it together.

In the second paragraph, the second sentence contains a small grammatical error. "to" should be edited to "that" or "who"

Differences from Other Visualizations

This section may be necessary to differentiate power mapping from other, similar visualizations. However, it may be a good idea to edit this section of the Stakeholder_analysis page to reflect power mapping as another form of stakeholder analysis.

Notes

[6] and [7] are the same reference - consider combining

same for [8] and [9]

Also, [1] and [13] are the same. In this case however, because they are not consecutive, you can “name” the reference [1], and for any subsequent use of this reference, you can simply use the “naming” feature, and it will automatically show that it is the same reference. For example, in the begining syntax for reference one (usually

The only thing you would change is the name of the source inside the quotation marks. From that point on, whenever referencing this source, you can simply type:

As long as the name inside the quotation marks is the same for the first and subsequent citations it will link to the source with the same name.

I hope that you find some of this useful. Thank you for producing this article. It is a good contribution to an accessible knowledge base. Umich hudsonmh (talk) 19:40, 9 March 2014 (UTC) ~FloydSumich~