User talk:MirandaESM/sandbox

Hi MirandaESM,

I reviewed the draft of the Almeida-Sanchez v. United States article that you have in your sandbox, and it looks great! It is majorly improved from the original stub. Your extended discussion of the three opinions is particularly strong. It is easy to understand and clearly outlines reasoning that the judges included.

I have a few suggestions for things that could be improved in your current draft. I understand that you are still in the early stages of working on this article, so forgive me if you would have gotten around to these additions in due course. In any event, here are my suggestions:

I think that you could improve the introductory paragraph. In its present form, it is repetitive in its sentence structure. You might consider varying your word choice and/or the formatting. Additionally, I checked the link to the first source you cite (which looks to be a hold over from the stub): "Almeida-Sanchez v. United States 413 U.S. 266 (1973)". Encyclopedia of the American Constitution. Gale. 2000. Retrieved August 14, 2012. I would recommend deleting this source, as a subscription is necessary to reach the content. Additionally, the information it supports could be supported by the case itself.

I recommend adding more secondary sources. You are currently only citing to one statute, one reg, and the case itself. Given the apparent importance of the case, I assume there are numerous textbooks, law review articles, and treatises that are on point. For example, you might consider keeping/discussing the article mentioned in the “further reading” section of the stub: Santana, Mark R. (1975). "Almeida-Sanchez and Its Progeny: The Developing Border Zone Search Law". Arizona Law Review. 17: 214.

You might also consider adding additional substantive sections. For example, you could include a brief discussion of the subsequent jurisprudence or the attention the case received from the news media at the time. NY Times or ScotusBlog might be places to check.

I hope these suggestions are helpful. Good luck adding content and polishing the article!

Best, Bluebook-enthusiast