User talk:MishaSayenkoCSUEB/sandbox

Peer Review By Kelly Nguyen
Arguments for assisted suicide I like how you made the arguments for assisted suicide short and concise. I would expand more on arguments for assisted suicide since having one point may not make a strong enough argument. If you do end up adding more information, I would recommend doing it in bullet or number format so the reader can easily find and read it. You used good reliable sources and I like how you used statistics to back up your claims. Using numbers puts more strength in your argument. Overall, I like that it has a good lead and have neutral content, just expand more on this subject because there are many arguments for assisted suicide.

Oregon Statistics

The lead sentence is a bit unclear since I do not know what you are trying to convey from the get-go. Try to be more clear and introduce us more about what you are going to talk about. The information, neutral content, and sources are there, but the flow is a bit choppy and could use some connecting/transitioning sentences to make it a better paragraph. I noticed you're missing some sources in your paragraph so make sure you remember to cite everything you do.

U.S Polls First thing is you should write out the U.S. instead of abbreviating it. It's better to let readers know what you are talking about even though it may be obvious. The first sentence isnt clear and not sure what it is leading to. Try to state what the purpose maybe. You are listing a bunch of information and data, but what you are not connecting them to one another and saying what is so significant about this information.

Overall good paragraph. Your tone was neutral and never stated a side. You should add more sources since it is a bit lacking. You first sentence should be a bit more clear and should try to introduce the reader to what you are going to talk about. I checked your sources and they all seem to be reliable. Good job.