User talk:Missmj180/Creeping normality

S- nice work on your edits and changes. I like your Article Lead edits, as these are important since the Article Lead is the first thing readers read/notice. I agree with changing the passive verbs to active verbs; it makes the writing stronger. Good job! DrTraceyHayes (talk) 06:57, 27 February 2020 (UTC)

Hi Shelley, this is my peer review of the articles and your changes so far. I love the concept of this article. It's something that I guess I'd consciously thought about, but didn't realize it had an actual name.

I like that the article is very concise and easy to understand. It explains the concept very well. And I like your edits to the introductory section. It's a process that we follow, not just a way something happened. But you do a very One grammatical change I would suggest is to change out your passive voice verbs. That's the verbs are, is, was, were, be, being, been. In my undergrad I had a teacher that ripped on students for using those words saying it's lazy writing, and it stuck with me. Essentially it's just rearranging your sentences so the subject comes first. Ex. "Jared Diamond first coined the phrase creeping normality in is 2005 book..."

I would also recommend changes the section title of "Other Uses" to "Examples" so people better understand what they are about to start reading on the page.

Zagfan015 (talk) 05:26, 23 February 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback, Kristine. I really like your suggestions and will look to update the framing of some of the writing. I think the suggestion of changing the heading to examples is smart change also. I wasn't sure if that was something I was able to change but just checked it out and it looks like it can be changed. Thanks for all your input!

Shelly Missmj180 (talk) 05:04, 24 February 2020 (UTC)