User talk:Mjlmufc/sandbox

MECH 2960 Instructor Review
I apologize that I didn't get to provide a review before now. I see you've uploaded both what's in your sandbox and a few other things that were incorporated throughout.

Here are my comments, which you can consider as final tweaks:
 * I see there's no introductory sentence to this whole article. Before the table of contents, wouldn't it be good to in one sentence define for readers what carbotanium is? I think that's really helpful from a usability standpoint
 * have you considered linking the words "carbon fiber" to the article in wikipedia on that https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Carbon_fibers
 * made also where it says "total strain", you could link the word "strain" to the wikipedia article on strain? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deformation_(mechanics)
 * For the sentence "The components of carbotanium; carbon fiber and titanium, are woven together to form a strong, light material that can withstand significant amounts of heat and strain." you don't need a semi-colon there, should just be a comma
 * You mention the strength-to-density ratios, then in the next sentence say that for that reason it can withstand high temperatures of 315°C. I don't understand the connection. How does strength and density result in high temperature withstanding?  I think there's something else about the materials that is resulting in this higher temperature usage.
 * In terms of citations, did you find any references in the library resources about this material? Maybe in Knovel or e-book collections?
 * Any references to add to the "Usage" section?
 * The sentence "Although not all Zondas are made from carbotanium, some are formed from carbon fibre." could use a little clean-up. Could you make it better?
 * The sentence "They have also used other variations of metal/composites." it is not obvious what "They" refers to.

Please make an effort with these, and it'll be great! UML MECH2960 (talk) 21:09, 13 December 2018 (UTC)