User talk:Mjmakepeace

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Hello, Mjmakepeace, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Your draft
Hi. I moved your draft back to your sandbox because it isn't yet ready to be "live" in Wikipedia's mainspace.
 * You probably should be working to improve the New energy vehicles in China article rather than creating a separate article about the "electric vehicle industry in China". While it's possible to expand a part of that article into a stand-alone one, I think you'd be better off expanding that article.
 * Generally speaking, a Wikipedia article shouldn't repeat information found in other articles. Instead, it should briefly summarize the topic while linking to the main article if readers want to learn more.
 * If you do create a stand-alone article, needs to begin with a lead section that summarizes all the major points of the article. Right now, what you have is more of an introduction. Your lead should start with something like The electric vehicle industry in China... and present a succinct statement of what the article is about. The remainder of the lead needs to summarize all the major points of the article. The lead should be a summary - there shouldn't be anything in the lead that isn't discussed in more detail in the body of the article.
 * Outside of the lead, every statement you make needs to be tied directly to a reliable source. After the statement, there should be a source. You can use a single source to support several sentences in a row, if it supports everything you say in those sentences, but you need to have at least one source per paragraph, and you shouldn't have any text after the final reference in a paragraph.
 * You can't say things that People believe that Electric vehicles are zero emission vehicles. Do all people believe this? According to whom? And how was this measured? "People believe" is far too vague a statement for a Wikipedia article. Beyond this, Wikipedia articles start with the main point - "EVs contribute to carbon emissions during the manufacturing process". You also should avoid talking to your readers directly, for example, when you say "If we were to compare the emissions..." you aren't writing in an appropriate tone. You also can't say something like "Hopefully there has been a cost/benefit analysis". This is an opinion, not a simple statement of facts.
 * You need to focus the article specifically on the EV industry in China. General information that really applies to the electric vehicle, electric car, or one of the other articles in Template:Electric vehicles. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:08, 31 May 2022 (UTC)