User talk:Mkench17

Greetings
Hey--ggwp (talk) 00:26, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Arcadia Fund has been accepted
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problems with the draft
You're presenting the grants made by the fund in two different graphs, giving   the same information: grants per year and cumulative grants are actually the same data; duplicating it is the way an expansive press release  would be written, but not an encyclopedia article. Additionally graphs, even a single grqaph, are inappropriate as a way of presenting what is actually a data tsble--it's visual clutter. he way an expansive press release would be written, but not an encyclopedia article

The text is also written using promotional adjectives and flowery phrases, The long section on activities and the list of selected large grants are also excessive detail. This is not the place for PR.

Please rewrite the article appropriately, or I shall.

(It's not your fault, but the article should not have been accepted from draft; it was  accepted by a now banned member of a paid editing ring, who was engaged in accepting articles written by his sockpuppets and accepted unrelated articles also that did not really meet our standards).  DGG ( talk ) 00:50, 13 June 2020 (UTC)