User talk:Mkirollos0/sandbox

TA Comments:

In-text citations: yes

Professional tone: yes

Paraphrasing real science: yes

Grammar and spelling: equations not formatted correctly, review Matt’s email on equation formatting

Links to other wiki articles: none

Score: 17/20

Peer Review

Hey Monica!

I like the information you presented in your article. Regarding the first sentence in your first paragraph, is it necessary to explain quantum mechanics for the reader at this point in the article? If it is, then feel free to leave it in, otherwise it may feel redundant. Also, between the first sentence and the last sentence of your first paragraph, you went from "the Schrodinger Equation" to "the Schrodinger's equation," just a heads up.

The first sentence of the second paragraph you used the word simply instead of simplify. Also when you say electronic motion, I think you mean to say electron motion. In the second sentence you misspelled wavefunctions on accident. I like what you did with the equations you added, but I think there's a way to input equations specifically into Wikipedia instead of uploading the photo you did. I have no idea how to but I'm just going off of how I've seen other Wikipedia pages information.

Also, instead of just listing off the people you did at the bottom of the page, you should the links to their respective Wikipedia pages (you should do this for some of the earlier stuff too, like the Born - Oppenheimer Approximation, the Schrodinger Equation, etc).

Otherwise, you're good to go!

MAZMANIAN, CHRISTOPHER ARMEN Peer Review Score: 20/20