User talk:Mlove10/Aragonese dialects

Hi Megan, this looks like an appropriate start to your translation, but I do wonder how useful some of those lists of terms are really going to be. I'm not sure they need to be in the final version, especially if they don't come with English glosses (=translations). For the next step, after the peer review, you'll want to really focus on the parts that have the best citations to incorporate them. Bradhoot (talk) 18:17, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi Megan, I'm really hoping this is the correct way to leave feedback this time :) For the most part the article seemed pretty straight forwards in explaining the four major types of Aragonese along with the few other forms. One suggestion I did want to make is that the word "variants" may be closer to what the article is trying to say instead of using "varieties" within your first few sentences. The other suggestion I wanted to make has to do with the format of the article. It looks like the "heading" text option might not be being used and I think it would be easier on the eye and organization-wise. Your in text citations look great and there are plenty to use if the reader is confused, I think this is a great base article for learning the major factors of the language. SantanaG123 (talk) 21:13, 3 November 2021 (UTC)Santana

-- Gracias por colaborar con tus compañeros para producir el mejor artículo final posible, aunque habría sido mejor si hubieras incluido un par de sugerencias más para llegar a cinco. Bradhoot (talk) 13:22, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

Comments on second draft
Good work on your draft article! Here are some comments to help you revise as you prepare to publish your work by integrating it with the existing English article. I think maybe you only have sufficient references to really support the middle section, so you might want to concentrate on beefing that up. You can also draft a general introduction, perhaps, build on the existing one, but more natural. In addition to these changes and the ones I made directly, in our workshop, you should be prepared to think about how you’re going to incorporate your work into the existing article. Where is each piece going to go? How will you integrate things so that you’re not duplicating existing material? Where will you replace existing material with your new material? How might you need to alter your translation to fit in the existing context, including some possible re-writing?
 * I'd recommend re-reading the opening paragraphs with an eye toward making sure it's idiomatic English. There are some phrasings there that read as translation-ese, and it’s fairly hard to follow. This is actually a comment throughout: you should go back through everything and make sure that what you’re writing is comprehensible for its meaning and sounds like natural English.
 * I don’t understand what this means: “complex dialects and the speakers (like the cheso, the chistabino...) would be dialects.”
 * I don’t understand what this means either “would be in continuation to these, which would have been Castilianized and uniform in a process favored by their plainer spelling.”
 * What are “transition solutions”?
 * The sentence in the Eastern Aragonese section is hard to understand, and also strikes me as translation-ese.
 * I don’t quite get the table in the Classifcation section. Didn’t we just discuss how there are debates about the classification? So whose classification is this one?
 * What does this mean: There are different degrees of erosion-purity, homogeneity-localism, evolution-archaism:
 * I think this claim either needs a citation or should be omitted: “Better conservation of the language, but with archaisms”
 * For the list in the Axial Pyrenees Valleys section, maybe consider making it a table, where the lefthand column is labeled “Valley” and the right hand column is labeled “Aragonese Variety” or something like that?
 * What is “Pre-Pyrenees”? Also, in this section, “better” or “worse” according to whom? If there isn’t a good source for this, omit it. The same comment goes for the next two sections, which appear to lack citaitons.
 * 0i? Should this be “hi”?

Bradhoot (talk) 22:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)