User talk:Mmadrid12/Phamaly Theatre Company

Peer Review for Mmadrid12/ Phamaly Theatre Company:

I thought that the draft provided a detailed analysis of adaptions that Phamaly has made to make theatre more accessible for their actors and to challenge the audience's preconceptions of disability. There was a meaningful understanding of the elements of theater, including the use of Bertolt Brecht style which places the spotlight on the audience, and the re-working of traditional works to provide actors with creative liberty with their disability.

Here are my suggestions for the article draft:

There is no "lead" in the draft. I would suggest to add one as stated Wikipedia's guidelines. Make sure the lead addresses all parts of the article. Also, the lead (and the article body) would benefit from an introduction to Phamaly Theatre Company, including what it is and their values and mission. The sections seem to be organized by each source circling around a theme- "normalizing disability" and "making theatre accessible". I appreciated this aspect of the article, but I felt that the themes could be interwoven together instead, condensing it to two sections rather than four. The article is neutral to me. There could be a more specific comparative analysis of other theaters (historical and modern; conventional and disability) which could provide a contextually well-rounded view of Phamaly. The sources are provided by author name and the source title. I would suggest utilizing the cite tool provided by Wikipedia. In general, I think the draft is well written, but it needs to a couple of additions and revisions in order to provide a broader view of Phamaly Theatre Company for readers and to meet the Wikipedia's guidelines, such having a lead and citing sources.

Siriachawiki114 (talk) 01:03, 16 May 2022 (UTC)siriachawiki114