User talk:Mmcunningh/Alfrets Mirulewan

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This article seems to contain most of the pertinent information, but there is no structure at all. You may want to review the instructions given in blackboard on copying and pasting the structural elements into your article before you start writing. As it stands, though the information is present, it isn't in the correct format. Also, make sure you are citing your sources correctly, and paraphrasing where possible. Just taking words directly from the articles does not have the same effect as putting things in your own words. Jdrobertso (talk) 16:20, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Insert comment here test. Crtew (talk) 14:18, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

"new article content" get rid of this, "Kisar, Maluku Islands, Indonesia" put in Indonesia after you say the city Give more background of the story he was investigating when he was murdered also give more details you never mention the name of his partner that he was with when he was killed, work on your citing of sources "Alfrets Mirulewan was killed doing what he loved to do" you can get rid of or re word this sentence also try and tell why the police tried to cover up his murder and also put your sources in the reference section Acmaxey (talk) 23:00, 15 October 2011 (UTC)