User talk:Mmersenne

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Again, welcome! Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 19:24, 20 August 2014 (UTC)

WP:MOS and WP:MEDMOS
Please take some time to read this. You will note that no other headings contain all caps. You will also note the word patient is not used but person instead. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 20:00, 20 August 2014 (UTC)
 * You will also notice that the ref always comes after the punctuation not before. Doc James  (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 20:03, 20 August 2014 (UTC)

Refs
For references on Wikipedia we very strongly prefer the use of high quality recent secondary sources. We do not like the use of primary sources. Can go into the reason why if you like.

Thus we do not really like the use of sources like this

Can you please use secondary sources going forwards. Pubmed will allow you to limit your searches to secondary sources / review articles from the last 5 years.

Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 20:55, 20 August 2014 (UTC)

Hum
The text you have added here

"When palliative care teams work in partnership with cancer specialists, patients with ovarian cancer experience reduced symptoms, better communication and psychological and spiritual care"

is exceedingly similar to this text here

"When palliative care teams work in partnership with cancer specialists, patients with breast cancer experience reduced symptoms, better communication and psychological and spiritual care"

The text is copyrights...

Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 20:58, 20 August 2014 (UTC)

Further issues
In this edit you added

"Palliative care is specialized medical care for patients with serious illnesses, including cancer. It focuses on providing relief from the symptoms, pain, and stress of the disease as well as improving quality of life for both the patient and the patient's family"

ref says

"Palliative care is specialized medical care for people with serious illnesses. It focuses on providing patients with relief from the symptoms, pain, and stress of a serious illness—whatever the diagnosis. The goal is to improve quality of life for both the patient and the family." 

That is not paraphrased enough. Before you edit further articles please fix these issues. Thanks Doc James  (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 21:16, 20 August 2014 (UTC)
 * WP:COPYVIO is the relevant policy. Wiki CRUK John (talk) 14:02, 21 August 2014 (UTC)

Response
Wondering if you have read the above? Can you please respond here? Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 23:04, 21 August 2014 (UTC)

Parkinson's disease
Thanks for your addition to Parkinson's disease. Have a look through the changes I made to your addition. I think it might be helpful for your future editing.
 * One of the sources was a primary source, which we try to avoid (see WP:MEDRS)
 * The other sources were templated (good work) but there is normally no need to add a URL to the Pubmed website if you've already added pmid=12345678 to the template code
 * Some sources were used more than once. Rather than repeating the entire template, it is okay to use (with a forward slash). This cites a statement to a reference you've defined earlier.

Let me know if you need a hand with anything! JFW &#124; T@lk  21:36, 22 September 2014 (UTC)