User talk:Moaghete

Mo Abudu
Hello. I reverted your edit on Mo Abudu because it had many inline external links, please use wikilinks to link to other Wikipedia articles, not links to sites outside of Wikipedia; the language was not encyclopedic style; probably all of the claims you made were unsourced, please cite reliable sources; it used WP:PUFFERY language that promoted the subject in a biased fashion; and as per WP:ELMINOFFICIAL you added links in the External Links section to more than the minimum amount of her sites. I suggest you add to the article one piece at a time, rather than one big edit covering everything, and bearing in mind the points above. If you wish to discuss any of these points then we can do so on the article's talk page where I would be happy to help you understand how to add to the article. Thank you. -Lopifalko (talk) 09:25, 8 May 2018 (UTC)


 * I have added two of the facts you added that were sourced, about EbonyLife TV and about EbonyLife Films. -Lopifalko (talk) 11:59, 8 May 2018 (UTC)


 * Hello Lopifalko, Thank you for your messages. My name is Monica and I am the head of social media for EbonyLife TV and I handle all of Mo Abudu's social media account. She has asked I edit her page and that's what I am trying to do. All external links are sourced articles about Mo Abudu's works and achievements. Every content on the page was approved by Mo Abudu herself. The initial websites under external links no longer exists. EbonyLife TV and EbonyLife Films are her companies and those are the official websites. Kindly let me know the next steps


 * You say "All external links are sourced articles about Mo Abudu's works and achievements" but these are the external links that you added: http://www.ebonylifetv.com, https://ebonylifefilms.com/fiftymovie/, https://www.facebook.com/desperatehousewivesafrica, https://twitter.com/SonsOfTheCaliph, https://ebonylifefilms.com/theweddingparty/, https://ebonylifefilms.com/twp2, https://www.sonypicturestelevision.com, http://ebonylifetv.com/2018/03/29/ebonylife-and-sony-pictures-television-announce-scripted-television-development-deal/, https://www.ridgewayschool.com, https://www.midkent.ac.uk, https://www.westkent.ac.uk, https://www.westminster.ac.uk. They are either generic links to the subject itself, they are not links to articles; or they are links to primary sources (the source of the information, not third party disinterested reliable sources talking about the subject). Any links you did provide to articles by non-primary sources I have added back to the article. -Lopifalko (talk) 13:37, 8 May 2018 (UTC)


 * Please understand that this Wikipedia article is not one of Mo Abudu's social network pages. Please read Conflict of interest. As a paid editor, paid by the subject of the article, you are unlikely to be able to add content that is objective, as evidenced by your edits so far which have painted the subject in a promotional light. If you wish for facts to be added to the article then you should propose them on the article's talk page where they can be assessed by others (please read Edit requests). If they are acceptable then another editor can add them to the article. All facts need to be sourced to disinterested reliable sources. Thank you. -Lopifalko (talk) 13:51, 8 May 2018 (UTC)


 * Hello Lopifalko, this was the first edit I did. After your message about changing to wiki links and reliable sources which are links to articles depicting certain statements in the writeup, I did that. I have done 2 other edits correcting these errors but from this message it looks like you didn't see them. I used wiki links for Fifty, sony pictures, the schools mentioned and others. And used external links showing articles for the reference sections. Please check again


 * I have restored a small fraction of what you added, but mostly I cannot see the edits to match what you are saying. Allow me to explain:


 * You added this: "At age 19, she was selected to be the brand ambassador for AVON Cosmetics for the African market." without a reference.
 * You replaced "Abudu lives in Lagos. She has a son and a daughter. and was formerly married to Tokunbo Abudu", which was referenced, with "Mo’s parents are from Ondo Town, in the south-west of Nigeria. She is the eldest of three sisters and is extremely close to her mother, whom she describes as her biggest supporter. She is very proud of her children, whom she calls her greatest achievement - her daughter Temidayo, who is a film and TV producer, and son Adekoyejo, a budding art consultant. Mo lost her father at the age of 11.", which was not referenced. Her relationship to her mother and to her children is not of concern here when not referenced to reliable sources that point out how improtant it is.
 * You added "Mo is highly sought after for her knowledge of the creative industries. She has spoken at the Wharton School of Business, Cambridge Judge Business School and Harvard University, and has received many international recognitions, including Forbes’ award as ‘First African woman to launch a pan-African TV channel’" with a source that does not appear to support any of these claims (correct me if I am wrong). "Mo is highly sought after for her knowledge of the creative industries." is almost certainly never going to be appropriate as it sounds too self serving, too WP:PROMO.
 * In that same edit you added "and CNN’s report on her as ‘Africa’s Queen of Media who conquered the continent’" where the closest the source you provide says is "But what makes Abudu's story remarkable is not that she conquered African TV -- but that she did it without any prior media experience."
 * In that same edit you added that "She was conferred with an honorary Doctor of Humane Letters (Honoris Causa) by Babcock University in 2014." that is unsourced.
 * Please, as per Edit requests, please suggest the facts you would like to add to Talk:Mo Abudu, with supporting references, and I or someone else can assess and add them if suitable. Thank you. -Lopifalko (talk) 05:51, 9 May 2018 (UTC)
 * This edit of yours suggests you are not interested in following this suggestion. -Lopifalko (talk) 12:48, 14 May 2018 (UTC)