User talk:Mocarlo/sandbox

Ming's peer review by Lily
I love the flow of this article! The coherency of this article leads readers smoothly.

What are really good:
 * Great flow! The author uses a lot of transition words and key words to make the article coherent.
 * The explanation of each equation is clear enough to lead readers.
 * The sentences are concise and are combined with appropriate conjunctions.
 * Great structure!

What can be improved:
 * In some sentences, it would be better if the author may use passive voice. (Please see the marked-up articles.)
 * Few parts may lose neutrality.

LittleWen (talk) 05:05, 29 November 2017 (UTC)