User talk:MoistOpinion/sandbox

Peer Review
I finished the peer review that should have been sent. I would like to add that I really liked this outline. It was very specific and delved into the different factors that are behind the success of East Africans in long-distance running. I think it very unique. I would add a small section about the tie between nationalism in sports. donkask Donkask (talk) 03:29, 14 November 2020 (UTC)

This outline provides a good overview of what the article will cover. I do think that it would be helpful to clearly divide the information you have here into a lead summarizing the importance of the article, as well as other sections and subsections that aid the logical flow of the article and make it easier for readers to find certain information. If possible, a history section might help explain the importance of long-distance running and how the sport has changed over time in Ethiopia. I’ve found that using visual editing, rather than source editing, makes formatting article drafts much easier. Sago1031 (talk) 22:58, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review: I really like the basis that you're setting up in which to examine long-distance running in Ethiopia. I think the quantity of empirical evidence will go a long-way in supporting the point you're trying to make. However, I think when possible adding a few more of your own words would be beneficial in transitioning your outline into a paragraphical working wikipedia page. (talk) 16:32, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review
I also like how you have been setting up format of your page. I would also make note that having quantitative evidence would help with the points you are making. I think there also needs to be a bit more explanation part because there are some terms that I don't really understand and I think it would be helpful to link them to websites that talk about them. Also, I'm a little confused on how this connects back to politics. How does long-distance running affect political life in Ethiopia? International? Domestic? How is it lead to policy changes? Something to think about

Sleuth — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sleuthsr21 (talk • contribs) 23:52, 13 November 2020 (UTC)