User talk:Mollyemm0307/sandbox

The first two sentences in early life can be merged together.

I agree that the first two sentences should be merged together to make it flow better. In the second section in the second sentence delete also to make it sound more professional and sound better. "Later her husband and her got divorced", there should be a comma after later, her husband. Great section about her early life and education, I thought it just enough information. Career section is well thought out and organized, but where is all the information coming from? there is no sources linked or sources on the bottom of the sandbox. Also, in the last paragraph you already mentioned that she is lesbian in the early life section, you should either try to combine those section about her being lesbian or only stating it once so the information does not become repetitive. Overall, I thought you did a great job. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sealy1999 (talk • contribs) 01:23, 1 December 2018 (UTC)