User talk:Moneybags10/sandbox

Peer Review You did a great Job in the first paragraph of explaining what direction you were going to bring your paper. You also did a good job of giving credit to the ones who were doing the research. You did a good job in the later paragraphs of explaining what research was all about. My main problem with this paper is you have a lot of grammatical errors that, at some points, can take away from the main purpose of this paper. I really like how you ended you last paragraph, when you talked about how people would refer to gender. You also did a good job of adding in text citations. I also couldn’t see if you had any sources in your sandbox.

Feedback on draft
Mike: This is a great start. You have pulled out good quotations and summarized the article well. When writing, trust that your reader to understand if something is important. No need to tell them that something is impressive or otherwise. Also, revise your writing so that it will fit into a Wikipedia article. Take out mentions of yourself or this class, and add the citation according to Wikipedia's format so that you end up with a hyperlinked number. Also, use the author's last names, not first names, when referring to them.

You could even shorten this summary. You only need one or two short paragraphs per source. Keep the main points/what is most relevant and important for this article, and take out the rest.

Mbrzycki (talk) 22:46, 25 March 2019 (UTC)