User talk:Monicaviloria/sandbox

Copyedit an Article
I'm sorry to say your edit didn't really improve the sentence. There were other, more obvious chances for improvement. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:06, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Adding Sources
Your first source is both reputable and relevant to the article. The second source, however, seems only loosely connected to what the article says. It may indirectly support the first sentence, but you should see if you can find a more relevant source. Do some research and update your sandbox within a week. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:48, 3 March 2018 (UTC)


 * The second source appears to support information that already has a source, but it won't hurt to have more than one source. Go ahead and add your sources to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 22:16, 22 April 2018 (UTC)


 * I saw you only added one source to the article. If you want to add the second source for a better grade, do it within the next two days. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:55, 1 May 2018 (UTC)


 * I saw that you added the second source. You're done! Josef Horáček (talk) 16:17, 6 May 2018 (UTC)

Adding a Lead
You will notice that "Sport in London" actually does have a lead, and the "missing lead" template should be removed. You should find another article as soon as possible. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:55, 1 April 2018 (UTC)


 * New article ("Sports equipment") approved. Please write a draft within a week. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:05, 6 April 2018 (UTC)


 * Your draft needs some revision. A few suggestions: 1. You should delete the second sentence. It's awkwardly phrased and redundant. Instead, move the second-to-last sentence ("The equipment ranges...") in its place. 2. "as tool used to help the athletes play the sport easier" - should be "as a tool," and delete "easier." 3. After that should come the sentence starting with "The equipment ranges..." 4. This is followed by your sentence about injury prevention, but you need to rephrase it. I think you're trying to say that over time, many sports have started requiring more protective gear to prevent injuries. 5. Delete the sentence beginning with "The equipment required may range..." and close with the sentence about department stores.


 * Once you make these changes, add the lead to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 04:39, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * I saw you added the lead. You're done with this assignment! Josef Horáček (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2018 (UTC)