User talk:MonsieurHans

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Hi Erick,

Great work on the article. I added a bunch of external links and made some grammatical changes (I've attached a screenshot of the changes in the comments on Canvas).

1. what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? I like the flow of the article, it is easy to follow. 2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I would recommend using Wikipedia external links for things like the names of the universities instead of using them as a citation. This would help reduce the number of citations and abide better with Wikipedia laws. 3. What’s the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? I think breaking up some sentences would be helpful and improve the flow more. 4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! I really like how you worded the sentences in your article by using the information from the sources. I would like to apply that to my article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by StatisticsStudent (talk • contribs) 08:04, 29 November 2021 (UTC)