User talk:Montananelson/sandbox

I am really impressed by the amount you have already written. I like the section about differences from Western feminism, however, as it is quite a complicated text I would suggest inserting much more inter-wiki links as they would help explain a lot of complicated terms or concepts. If there is no wiki paje existing, I think you should try explaining the concept a bit more. In the Footbinding section i think you are missing the preposition "in" in the sentence: For example, "in" Chinese society during this time. Also, inter-wiki link would be good for "Female chastity" or more explanation of what it means. Also, I think you should join your citations 3-6 into one and use that number, not repeat the same source in the bibliography. Otherwise, I think this is great and will be good to build on. Barborale (talk) 16:52, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

This is a great start for two important sections for the page. The foot binding section is very clear and organized. I would say for the first section to try to insert more wiki-links so that readers can research some of the terms used. Maybe get rid of some unnecessary words such as, "one could say". Overall, I would try to incorporate more sources for both sections, and condense the bibliography so the same source is not listed multiple times. Otherwise, these sections have a solid introduction and will be good to develop in the future. Mtatherton18 (talk) 20:37, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Your sections are well-written with clear and concise explanations and examples. I like how you introduced the sections and followed up with new information and sources. I would be careful when describing "Western feminists" and perhaps which feminists you are comparing because you can't assume the reader has a base understanding of Feminism in the West. Overall, you stayed on topic and added not too many unnecessary details. rebxlee (talk) 20:48, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

I think you could try splitting up your first paragraph into two, just to make it easier to read. Your information is good so maybe just find a place where you could start a new paragraph. If you can find it, maybe you could include information about why foot binding was a privilege in society. Caranlee (talk) 14:31, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

You have really good information, but your section could benefit maybe by talking more about a Chinese woman stereotype. Overall, really well done though. Maddywright (talk) 14:37, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I would explain the concepts of "translatability" and "transferability" to provide more information and context to the reader since we don't know what that is. Sallyfried (talk) 14:46, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This is a really good start, one thing I would add would be a description to your photo. I would also try to focus on explaining feminism as if the reader does not know what it is, this will help your writing be more clear. Larainal (talk) 14:50, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

You use a lot of names and examples of thought, but the context is a little confusing. Adding dates for when these feminist were around helps out the readers a lot. Samwolff450 (talk) 14:50, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

For the amount of information you have, I would add more sources.1oromo (talk) 14:51, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think the information you have is clear and concise. One criticism would be that you have an image of Qiu Jin but they are not mentioned anywhere on your page. Adding information about their history with relations to the feminist movement in China would be helpful. Charlieaabrams (talk) 14:58, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Good. I think more context about what these terms mean "translatability" and "transferability" would help a lot. "Western feminism differs from Chinese feminism in the way that it focuses a lot on "gender," which is not the way that feminism is analyzed historically in China" I think above sentence is repetitive. I would link to hypergamy. NGL but I didn't deduce what it meant... :0 lmao "Footbinding pointed up the physical differences between men" maybe change differences to superiority I think footbinding section needs more dates.Mlazarus14 (talk) 20:18, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you did a really good job with your section. I would only recommend adding one or two additional sources. --Dmastronardi (talk) 18:17, 7 April 2019 (UTC)

I loved your work i just think for all the information you have another source would be helpful Dougsitt (talk) 03:37, 10 April 2019 (UTC)