User talk:Moonmocha/J’s Heteronormativity, Cisheteronormativity, and Transgender Communication Studies

T's Peer Review
J, I really like the content you produced here! It's very educational and well-written to where it is detailed and accurate yet worded in a way for people who are unfamiliar to be able to understand, while also following the standard Wikipedia style. The only issue seems to be the some parts of it still seem to stray away from the unbiased style of wiki writing (such as the "I" statements in the beginning. What also might be helpful is to reference some of this content as things that these authors are referencing/arguing, rather than as a more "objective statement" (even if we know it to be true.) Everything else looks good, all of your sources are there with working links and accurate citations, and the information provided is both recent and relevant. Great job!

(Thebodocious (talk) 20:50, 15 April 2024 (UTC))


 * Thank you for your feedback! I definitely will start rewording certain statements to not include first person POV. I think I got a little confused with the assignment, so I'll tweak that to be fit for Wikipedia. I will also try to do your second critique as well and stop doing as many objective statements. Thank you so much for your feedback! I really appreciate it! Great work! Moonmocha (talk) 17:52, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Dr. E's Review
J, great start here. Update cisgendered to cisgender. Some bigger jargon will need unpacking like discursive violence. See my Canvas feedback for more info. OsaRosa (talk) 08:15, 16 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you! I will definitely make those changes and then expand more on more unknown vocabulary. Again, thank you so much! Moonmocha (talk) 17:53, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Expanding on my response, I'll also fix my citations and go through the list of words to watch as well, so that'll be an easy fix. Thank you so much! Moonmocha (talk) 17:57, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

feedback
Hi @Moonmocha, Well done on your first draft. Reading through the draft, it isn't super clear to me as a reader how this section relates back to the main article topic of LGBTQ+ Communication Studies. How are the theories of Heteronormativity and cisheteronormativity applied in LGBTQ+ communication studies? I think it's important to center the ideas in relation to the main article topic. Check out the section Theoretical traditions and research methods in the Women's studies article. Look at how they're able to write about the different theories in the context of the main article topic, Women's studies.Brianda (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:26, 17 April 2024 (UTC)