User talk:Morbiusgreen/sandbox3

6/11/2019 Evaluation by Afackrell
Afackrell (Afackrell) 22:30, 11 June 2019 (PST)
 * Points: 32/40
 * Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar
Does not meet standard "created by Don Manuel" "museum has many" "list of academies" "table, however, this table includes" add a comma after however "stipulations applied" "layman's terms" "women giving birth"

Language
Meets standard. Good use of formal language so far

Organization
Meets standard. Organization of heading, body, and citations looks good, as well as your added table

Coding
Exceeds standard Perfect Code.

Validity
Nearly meets standard Your information looks good. Definitely, some more you could add in each area. Especially the art section, even if you are just naming a few more pieces from Valencia!

Completion
Does not meet Standard Getting there in terms of length requirement, the table adds to that as well. Still missing a substantial amount of sources.

Relevance
Meets Standard Little irrelevant content.

6/13/2019 Evaluation by Paig5
Paig5 (Paig5) 14:05, 13 June 2019 (PST)
 * Points: 30/40
 * Grade: 75% or C

Spelling/Grammar
nearly meets standard

"Up until the 14th century physicians in Valencia weren't regulated, but until 1289 when Alfons III passed a law which opened up medical aid from medical professional not only to those of good wealth but to more of the population."

" Three of said law were as follows..."

"If necessary..."

Language
meets standard Overall your language is very professional

Organization
meets standard

Coding
nearly meets standard Something is up with the sources?? other than that it looks fine.

Validity
meets standard It seems that any statement you are making is met with a source to back it up.

Completion
Does not meet standard While I believe the amount of text you have is nearly an ok amount, you only have 10 of the required 20 sources.

Relevance
meets standard

6/17/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 16:39, 17 June 2019 (UTC)

There are a few bits and pieces here that you could use, but there is a bit too much that is not sufficiently noteworthy to include (see below). Also the editing is rather sloppy.
 * Points: 31/40
 * Grade: 77.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.
 * "Gonzilez Marti" misspelled. Try González.
 * "...were created Don Manuel..." +by
 * "However, he insisted..." strike 'however', since the statement after it does not contrast the preceding statement.
 * "The lsit of academies..." list
 * "...weren't regulated, that is until..." Comma splice. Make this into two separate sentences.
 * "Alfons III" should be Alfonso III.
 * "...medical field. three of...." period should be comma.
 * "Sometimes it can be held during anytime Easter week" anytime during. Also 'sometimes/anytime' should be ironed out.

Language
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...of eighteen institutions in the city..." It's best to clarify what sorts of institutions these are supposed to be. What in this context is 'an academy'? Are they like arts colleges with students and teachers? Are they where artists come together to share ideas and techniques? This should be made a little clearer - possibly just with a wikilink.
 * "...Valencia weren't regulated...." avoid contractions in formal writing.
 * "...set the roots..." laid the foundation.
 * "....a survey was passed out students...." to students.

Organization
Meets standard.
 * I think 'agriculture' would fit better under economy than 'culture'.

Coding
Nearly meets standard.
 * There should be main-article links to González Martí National Museum of Ceramics and Decorative Arts and Real Colegio Seminario del Corpus Christi (which is the official name for the Museo Del Patriarca).
 * The table needs a caption with a citation for the source of the date. See what I implemented on your draft.
 * Alfonso III should be hyperlinked.
 * There are code errors in the references. Reduce dates to just the years to fix this.

Validity
Meets standard.
 * Where are you getting the contents of the table? The table that I found in your Bombi source has different information in it, and has 24 rows.

Completion
Does not meet standard.

Relevance
Does not meet standard.
 * The paragraphs about the smoking and C-sections studies strikes me as insufficiently noteworthy to include.