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Alexandra Morris Peer Review
The first thing I noticed about this page (from reviewing the assigned google doc) was the extensive planning that was written up on the article. This group seemed to have strategized beforehand on what kind of edits they were going to make based on the article’s current state. They even listed out important dates for themselves, resources for references, and lists of potential sources. When looking at the state of the live article’s “lead”, it didn’t seem to have one that was much more than a sentence. They addressed this as one of the tasks listed in this group’s google doc was to add a lead section. The lead section that was written up in the google doc seemed to focus specifically on disability, I wonder if it would be useful to have a more general lead section, introducing the concept of body mind, and then go into how it is implicated in disability in a section later on in the page. Another thing I noticed on the actual article page was a lack of different sections, and a lack of any real cohesive structure, everything is put into one main page. There were a number of terms and definitions listed, but they were not grouped into any cohesive order, or sectioned off into different categories. The google doc seemed to focus on adding these different sections and headers which I think will be a really necessary and beneficial addition to this page in terms of structure. It was also noted by Wikipedia itself that this article is in need of different/additional citations for verification. Based on the extensive list of resources, articles, and references in this group’s google doc, it seems like they will be able to add to the existing list of references and contribute to helping make this page closer to obtaining verification. All of their sources look to be scholarly, published, and/or reliable in some way.

It seems like this group is very focused upon the disability aspect of body mind. To me, this seems very relevant and important to this subject as disability deals directly with links between the body and mind that are different than the “norm.” I wonder however if it would be helpful to include some other viewpoints in the article. For example maybe a viewpoint looking at gender identity and the body mind, or the body mind connection between different cultures. It looks like the group has already done a lot of work, however, on the disability aspect, so I am not sure if for their contribution, more would need to be added in addition to this. Some of the sources listed do have views that are not totally impartial, so I think the group will just have to word additions from these sources in a way that it impartial (which they seem to be doing from the writings so far in the google doc). Overall, it looks like this group has a nice plan to improve this article and specifically add relevant information on the disabilities aspect of this page.