User talk:Mossadeghx/sandbox

Ready! Your article is very well written and is in keeping with what Wikipedia expects stylistically. Make sure to go through and carefully reread and edit your article for any minor spelling or grammar errors in preparation for your final draft. Otherwise, you have done a great job using your sources to really strengthen the existing Wikipedia page for Futaki!

Batcow39 (talk) 16:49, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer review
There are lots of interesting information, and this page provides so many details about Makiko Futaki. But there are some spelling mistakes about Japanese name, and there also TA mentioned that:"The same ref shouldn’t be repeated multiple times in the ref list." You may need to change it as well. — Preceding unsigned comment added by RimlessYMD (talk • contribs) 16:12, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

Mossadeghx's Peer Review
Hello, this is a redo of my peer review, which evaluated the current version of the Futaki page instead of your sandbox version. Overall, the article is very well written and rich with the filmmaker's works. You've done a great job with citing every piece of information that you have acquired from your sources. You've also done a great job blending in quotes about the filmmaker. However, you could reduce run-on sentences a little bit when writing your article. For example, when you are trying to mention the filmmaker's works and include what other filmmakers thought of it, you ended up with a run-on sentences. It is better to just divide it to two sentences for a clearer experience for the reader. Finally, it would be better to insert evidence that support information about other filmmakers' opinions on Futaki's work. For example, when you mention that Futaki's work has impressed Miyazaki, how do we know it did? It would be useful to include evidence, like more quotes, that could prove this point. Other than that, the article is great!

WikiMaster008 (talk) 03:36, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi WikiMaster008,

Thank you for the kind words!I am not sure but I think you might have evaluated the current version of the Futaki page on Wikipedia instead of the Draft in my sandbox. My article was always divided into sections (including career, artistic style, etc) and when I looked at the edit history it brought me to the currently available wiki page and not the one I wrote in my sandbox. Kind regards, Mossadeghx (talk) 17:06, 26 February 2018 (UTC)