User talk:Mpiard/Transgenerational trauma

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Mpiard)


 * Link to the draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mpiard/Transgenerational trauma


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Transgenerational trauma

Evaluate the drafted changes
I agree with the exclusion of the sentence about refugees!

I'm not sure if it matters, but you have a reference section twice.

I changed a few things (bolded) in this sentence:

With the struggles that Aboriginal Australians face, their trauma is often passed down to their offspring as they (is they referring to the offspring or parents) are on the receiving end of the discrimination, often are targeted themselves as children (is this referring to when the parents were children, or the children themselves - if it referring to the parents when they were children, I think it should read "often were"), or grow up to face similar if not the same struggles as their family members.

I think this is a great addition to your article and will definitely help add needed information! Good job! LundyLoo (talk) 04:00, 27 October 2023 (UTC)