User talk:Mpohlman2000/sandbox

General Overview: In general, what you have written down is very good. The tone is very emotionally barren, which is definitely what an objective source needs. The wording is also quite precise, concise, and gets to the point. The latter also does not give off any sign of bias in its writing, which is also a plus. The length is also not too put-offish, which can be the case with some articles. Overall, it's a very good draft.

Relevance: In total, the article is mostly relevant to its topic. However, the final portion which discusses Gawain is slightly confusing to me. On that note, it does seem as though you drift off to discuss something that is not entirely relevant and important. It seems to slow the article's pace down by a bit and also doesn't seem all that important. I would recommend revising that section.

Neutrality: The article is completely neutral from what I can tell. Nothing else to comment.

Sources and Viewpoints: With multiple sources, I can trust that the information is quite good. I also made sure to look over the sources and find them adequate for use, as well as from an appropriate age (e.g. very recent). From this, I can tell that the viewpoints from these sources are carefully written out so as to ensure that there is no bias. The citations are also properly written out, and each citation points to the appropriate source to back up the fact. The sources, after carefully looking them over, are objective and do not contain large bias. Therefore, I believe that they are appropriate for the use of this topic.

Recommendations: My only recommendation would be what I've already stated, which would be the final portion of your piece. It is a little slow there and deviates from course. I would shorten that part up to make it more concise and easier to understand/more on topic.