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What was done well about the article? The article started by stating that this was a gender theory of ‘Anancy An Yella Snake and Po Patoo’. It then illustrated where two stories were taken from and the author of the collection, then preceded with a quick overview of the author and Anancy the main character in the stories. Also stating the language and culture the stories were representing and also the themes that were seen coming out of the two stories. The second heading was the background which spoke more broadly about Louise Bennett and Anancy, in this section it shows how Louise used these illustrations as a way of promoting the Jamaican language (patois). In anancy’s background the origin of Anancy stories, the ways that he was portrayed in the anthology, and how anancy stories were created and changed over time. The next head was the summary of the stories, it gave a clear summary, you could easily tell what the stories were about. The next heading was gender theory and language, which gave a brief explanation of gender and gender roles. This section illustrated how language and gender are used in mis Lou's stories. It spoke about how language enforces ‘and the nature in which masculinities and femininities are represented in popular culture. The final heading is prominent themes present in the stories, with five subheadings these are patriarchy & heteronormativity, Caribbean masculinities, Masculinity & violence against women, race & identity and colourism. In the first sub-heading it gave a clear meaning of patriarch and how it was present in the stories, also linking heteronormativity. In the second subheading academic sources were cited to illustrates Caribbean masculinities, along with hegemonic and toxic masculinity, also giving characteristics of toxic masculinity. The third subheading showed how in the story with ‘Anancy An Yella Snake’ there was evidence of violence against women. The fourth subheading showed how in same story (‘Anancy An Yella Snake) there was a level of racism and Louise challenges the negative notions about black males in the media at the time. The final subheading gave a clear definition of colorism.

Recommended changes This "==== Miss Lou ====th" could be could corrected and placed as a subheading instead. In anancy’s background, the word “griot” was mention, place a hyperlink to given the meaning of the word. The fifth and sixth sentences under the theme patriarchy could become one sentence. This paragraph could use some restructuring. Under the theme of Caribbean masculinities, hyperlinks could be placed on gendered roles, so the reader can get an understanding of what it’s referring to. The second sentence referred to various masculinities in the story ‘po patoo’ but different states what these different masculinities are. The theme of masculinity and violence against women could be placed under the theme of Caribbean masculinity because it speaks extensively about hegemonic masculinity which is also done under that theme. Colourism, race, and identity could place under the same theme because they are saying the same thing. Most of the examples are already place under race and identity, so the theme of colorism is just filled with the definitions that could be placed under race.

The lead of the Article The lead was clear on the importance of the topic. The lead could be more straightforward so readers can know what they are expecting to get from the article. That means stating in the lead the themes that are going to be expounded on. Structure of the Article It is a well-structured article; the difference between each section could be identified. The themes of race& identity and colorism could become one theme by removing some of the definitions.

Balancing Act Each section was lengthy giving clear definitions and examples of this in the stories. More content or linkage to the stories could be placed under the theme “Masculinity and Violence against Women” or it should be removed as a theme or combine with another. The article represented all perspectives in the literature. No conclusion was drawn in the article, every viewpoint was followed by reliable sources. The article does not make claims on behalf of unnamed groups of people.Misskenny21 (talk) 01:57, 31 March 2021 (UTC).