User talk:Mr06396/sandbox

From Dr. Cohen: I would love for you to add to the topic of ethnic hatred. The biggest challenge is that there needs to be an aging focus and that might limit the content. Doing the other one likely makes more sense. See what you can find in the literature.

Peer Review and copyedit
Hi! For the article you edited, Cumulative inequality theory, I see a lot of numbers following letters, ex. S9, WL7, etc. What are those? Inactive links to sources? I also do not see any source links by the way, but the sources are there. If you need help linking them, I figured out how to do it. The article is very well written. Very. The issue is that some parts might be a little more challenging to understand for the average person. This is our field, so we get it. I understand you. But I am unsure if others can. Maybe explain certain details further in simpler phrases. Your headers explain their bodies perfectly! Your lead explained/introduced the article information perfectly! Overall, the page is fine. I'd just like to suggest simplifying your explanations and linking your sources appropriately. I looked at the article as a whole, and not just certain sections, because I was unsure of what sections you specifically edited on your own. It was not clear in your sandbox. BCharlie (talk) 05:47, 5 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review response
Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate the encouragement. I have been having a bit of trouble with this assignment for it's nice to know that I am onto a good start. I have no clue what those letter number combinations were so I just removed them. Maybe while I'm editing I'll figure out what those were for. I will work on breaking down the content a bit more before my final draft. I think I was just trying to get all my thoughts out first and then go back and make changes and additions. I only did Core Ideas (Continued) section fully, and I made a minor edit to the Development and application section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mr06396 (talk • contribs) 23:48, 20 March 2018 (UTC)