User talk:Mtatherton18/sandbox

I really love your work, very detailed background and understanding. This can be even better if you choose only the most important points and focus on that, but overall looked great --Dougsitt (talk) 03:24, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

I think that this is a really good start. I like how you introduced Li clearly, so that we know who she was and why we include her in our article. I would suggest simplifying or deviding some of your longer, complicatd sentences (eg. She explained the historical discrepancies, arguing traditional cultural norms existed in socialist China, and the difficulty for women to identify in China, as they were torn between their established role at home and their new liberation put upon them by socialism.) I also think, that you should include the inter - wiki links that mae wikipedia connected and help explain a lot of concepts. Barborale (talk) 16:36, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

I think that you have a lot of great information in this section. To make it more thorough, I was thinking maybe you should link some of the key words to other Wiki pages or just to explain them more. In addition to this, one of the sentences in the middle of your paragraph seemed a bit wordy to me. I would just try to split it up so that the reader does not get overwhelmed with information. Otherwise, I think that your research is really well done and that this is a really great start. Montananelson (talk) 17:44, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

This is really interesting content and fits in well with the differences between Western and Chinese Feminism. You did a good job making sure all facts and opinions are cited from reputable sources, these sources also seem accessible and up-to-date. I suggest adding wikilinks and sources to other articles and external information that will add meaning to the subject. Are you planning to categorize this under another title? If so, don't forget to title your section. Overall, this is a high-quality start. rebxlee (talk) 21:12, 31 March 2019 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 161.253.105.190 (talk)

You did a good job of highlighting these women's roles in Chinese feminist history. I was kind of confused about the grammar of this sentence: "She explained historical discrepancies, arguing traditional cultural norms existed in socialist China. "Caranlee (talk) 14:13, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think overall that the content you have at the moment is quite good. I think if you expanded with maybe one or two more notable Chinese feminists then the section would be perfect. --Ghurley1 (talk) 14:15, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Good. I think this: "decided by others within the hierarchal system of society at the time." could be stated better or cut the at the time like: how women's liberation is decided by socially imposed hierarchies Also: Women's studies classes and the first women's studies department began in China because of her influence, and she created the Women's Studies Department at Zhengzhou University. Maybe switch to She founded the Women's Studies Department at Zhengzhou University, the first gender studies program in china. something like that uk.Mlazarus14 (talk) 14:28, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you could benefit by adding another prominent feminist to help the readers really understand what was going on at the time. You have great information though! Maddywright (talk) 14:48, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Your content is really good and you have two clear and concise paragraphs with relevant information pertaining to your topic. I like the use of images to show what feminists looked like. Charlieaabrams (talk) 18:21, 6 April 2019 (UTC)

I like the amount of sources you used, but i think you should add more facts to your writing. Otherwise, you did a great job. 1oromo (talk) 20:04, 6 April 2019 (UTC)

I think this is a good start to your article, I think it would be beneficial for you to add another feminist to fully give the extent of the prominence of the feminist movement. Larainal (talk) 18:08, 7 April 2019 (UTC)

The sentence starting with " Her influence led to the start " could be split into two sentences or written in a way that doesn't make it a run on. Sallyfried (talk) 18:37, 7 April 2019 (UTC)

Really good job! I think you should add subheadings for each prominent feminist. You presented really good content and images. Dmastronardi (talk) 18:45, 7 April 2019 (UTC)