User talk:Mtjc9109/Hadi al-Mahdi

I really did like all of the detail you had for each of your sections on your page. One thing that I think need to be changed is you need internal and external links added. It can be very simple to do and doesn't take much time. Do your best on it! Balmung576 8:25, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

You had good details. I could tell that you had done your research because you had new and different information in each section. You do a great job of talking about the events from the perspective of the Iraqi people (the anti-Iraqi government Iraqi people). You also have good information in the information bio box in the upper right hand corner. I had trouble finding that much information for my wiki page. Pjweinzapf (talk) 02:46, 6 October 2011 (UTC) User: Pjweinzapf October 5, 2011 9:44 pm

There are many places where citations are needed. Every section except for the "Reactions" section calls for more citations. This should be an easy fix, because you had to have found that information somewhere. Also, I would work on eliminating your bias. How would a pro-Iraqi government person feel if they read this article? You mention that the Iraq government is "corrupt" in the "Introduction" and "Context" sections. I know it is sometimes hard to put our biases aside, especially when they are ingrained in our minds, but for articles like this we must. Give the facts. Nothing more. Also, some basic grammar editing is needed. In the "Context" section (end of second line) you say "in his nations government" but it should say "in his nation's government." I know this sounds like a lot to look at, but the citations and grammar are pretty easy fixes. Just do your best to make it less biased. It is a challenge, but I know you can do it! Pjweinzapf (talk) 02:46, 6 October 2011 (UTC)   User: Pjweinzapf October 5, 2011 9:44 pm

mtjc9109: I liked your infobox. You used the structure well. More information is out there about your person to incorporate and then reference. Was he currently working as a journalist? Give us good credible/sources for information about Iraq. Paraphrase your sources in your own words. What other reactions are out there about Al-Mahdi's murder? Currently, the article has no "internal" links with any other Wikipedia article. Can you fill in any of the personal data? Search for him on the Lexis-Nexis database. Crtew (talk) 18:53, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

Two different names for the radio show. Crtew (talk) 19:06, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

I suggest you read the following from the Rubric: "Work on the Lead!", "Why is this Journalist important?", "voice", "words" (like very), and "Link to relevant points ..." Crtew (talk) 19:08, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

A simple Google search brought up more references than the basic ones included so far. I added the cite to the New York Times. But you should also see the articles by The Guardian and a statement by UNESCO. Crtew (talk) 19:10, 22 October 2011 (UTC)