User talk:Mulhallk/sandbox

Strengths -The theories you linked your topic to were insightful and interesting. -The topic is very relevant. -The article is well researched and the links were well placed, as was the quotation.

Areas for Improvement -The information can get somewhat repetitive and wordy. -I believe there has been a study on depression caused by Facebook if that's another area you would like to look into that might be relevant. -The addition of images would provide some visual aid for readers. GemmaMurphy (talk) 05:53, 19 November 2012 (UTC)

3 Strengths- - There is a great deal of information on your page. Good way of integrating how outside influences can influence personality psychology. Its interesting how social media influences ones personality, expand more on this. - The articles that are chosen seem to correlate well with your topic. Plenty of information on personality psychology.Also a great deal of sources. - Good range of topics/headings on your page that focus on relating your topic to the article. On your page so far i can see that you have a good sense for where your want this wiki page to go. Good first draft so far. I feel that you are off to a good start.

3 Weaknesses - -On many of your topics there seems to be an inconsistent flow in the writing, i can understand this because it is a first draft. At times it was a bit wordy, and felt like i was reading some of the same information over. This can be something to consider in revising in the final edit of the article. -Make headings/topics more clear, and to differentiate what you want to talk about more clearly. It was a bit difficult to follow since there was little structure in the headings and direction of the main points. - No picture on the page just something to remember. Georger93 (talk) 19:43, 19 November 2012 (UTC)