User talk:MuseumHours/Library of Congress Subject Headings

Hi,

This is a very interesting and topical choice of article. Please note that your passion for this topic is commendable and felt. Following this, a recommendation is the lead sentence is amended to be a statement, rather than a position. A thought is that this could be accomplished by removing the word "deemed inappropriate," as this appears to be an opinion rather than a cited source. If it is a cited source, it would be excellent if this could be included. Further to this, it is a recommendation to remove strong verbs or the adjectives, such as "significant" or "quarantining" to perhaps achieve the neutral tone as outlined in the training material. It is a thought that by doing this, your article will have enhanced impact.

Again, very interesting topic that I enjoyed reading.

Take care!

Lois

PS. I really hope I did this correctly!

Hi! It's Cam from your class. Sorry for taking so long to add to your talkpage, please reference my sandbox peer review for suggestions! https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MuseumHours/Library_of_Congress_Subject_Headings/Cameron_Kletke_Peer_Review — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cameron Kletke (talk • contribs) 21:01, 7 April 2022 (UTC)